Comments on: The Celebration – Fiction https://kristinavanhoose.com/2015/10/09/the-celebration-fiction/ Tue, 25 Oct 2016 23:37:44 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.com/ By: A Sidenote to my Followers About November | Kristina Van Hoose https://kristinavanhoose.com/2015/10/09/the-celebration-fiction/comment-page-1/#comment-641 Thu, 05 Nov 2015 04:46:30 +0000 http://kristinavanhoose.com/?p=574#comment-641 […] December I will resume discussing other things like the Monday Must Read and hopefully continuing Raveek’s story as well. I’m also hoping to get a few DIY projects posted, but we will see how timing goes. […] ]]> By: 8 Tips for Winning NaNoWriMo | Kristina Van Hoose https://kristinavanhoose.com/2015/10/09/the-celebration-fiction/comment-page-1/#comment-623 Thu, 29 Oct 2015 19:13:21 +0000 http://kristinavanhoose.com/?p=574#comment-623 […] instead of a work in progress like I usually do. I had two ideas, one of which was continuing Raveek’s story. The other was a previous NaNo idea entitled At Plot’s End that never got very far because I […] ]]> By: Kristina Van Hoose https://kristinavanhoose.com/2015/10/09/the-celebration-fiction/comment-page-1/#comment-606 Sun, 18 Oct 2015 00:37:06 +0000 http://kristinavanhoose.com/?p=574#comment-606 I’m hoping to use October’s prompts to continue his story and see what comes of it.🙂 Thanks for reading! ]]> By: Kathy Boles-Turner https://kristinavanhoose.com/2015/10/09/the-celebration-fiction/comment-page-1/#comment-605 Sun, 18 Oct 2015 00:10:32 +0000 http://kristinavanhoose.com/?p=574#comment-605 Well done. I’m interested to know more about Raveek and his country. Do you see this a serial piece? ]]> By: All Tied-Up In DARKNESS: Week One Poll Results | Brigit's Flame Writing Community https://kristinavanhoose.com/2015/10/09/the-celebration-fiction/comment-page-1/#comment-603 Sat, 17 Oct 2015 15:38:40 +0000 http://kristinavanhoose.com/?p=574#comment-603 […] have a tie! Congratulations, Kristina Van Hoose and t.s. […] ]]> By: t.s.wright https://kristinavanhoose.com/2015/10/09/the-celebration-fiction/comment-page-1/#comment-602 Sat, 17 Oct 2015 01:15:21 +0000 http://kristinavanhoose.com/?p=574#comment-602 Glad that you are back to writing with us again. I look forward to your perspective on the prompts.

It seems like you have the start of something here. If you do continue the storyline, I would suggest that you give the reader a chance to get to know your characters in a way that deepens their investment. An assasination is terrible and frenzied in a public setting -which you conveyed well- but the sense of tragedy is fleeting when you have no bond with the character.
You can watch the news and feel awful for victims of crime or war, but it doesn’t become a part of you unless a connection to the event is preestablished. As a writer you have the tools to wrench people’s hearts out. Take advantage of it. Make them feel the loss as well as the frenzy.

]]> By: Kristina Van Hoose https://kristinavanhoose.com/2015/10/09/the-celebration-fiction/comment-page-1/#comment-583 Mon, 12 Oct 2015 15:09:46 +0000 http://kristinavanhoose.com/?p=574#comment-583 Thank you for reading and taking the time to comment, Rio.🙂 ]]> By: Rio https://kristinavanhoose.com/2015/10/09/the-celebration-fiction/comment-page-1/#comment-581 Mon, 12 Oct 2015 14:50:51 +0000 http://kristinavanhoose.com/?p=574#comment-581 A lot of the description seems to be information that doesn’t directly foreshadow the events in this story and imply tensions that might be built on for a longer piece.

I would be interested to hear more about the world you are introducing and the characters.

]]> By: One Lovely Blog Award! | blabberwockying! https://kristinavanhoose.com/2015/10/09/the-celebration-fiction/comment-page-1/#comment-579 Mon, 12 Oct 2015 12:04:19 +0000 http://kristinavanhoose.com/?p=574#comment-579 […] Kristina Van Whoose […] ]]> By: Vibrant https://kristinavanhoose.com/2015/10/09/the-celebration-fiction/comment-page-1/#comment-578 Sun, 11 Oct 2015 07:52:13 +0000 http://kristinavanhoose.com/?p=574#comment-578 You are most welcome, Kristina🙂
Have a lovely Sunday and a great week ahead!

Love and light❤

Anand🙂

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